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    dots Submission Name: Dear Diarydots
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    Author: Jazzy
    ASL Info:    20/f/USA
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 90/221/227
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDear Diarydots
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    My wisdom is lost amidst these pages
    My hope and dreams
    Which make sense only to me.
    My dear diary.

    Every time I feel the urge to
    Let these words flow from my soul,
    There you are my dear diary.
    You've kept all of my secrets for
    All of this time.
    You keep your cool, dear diary
    In all of places that I lose mine.

    Without you my sanity is lost
    Somewhere
    I need you more than you know.

    My dear diary
    How do I express this feeling?
    I'm not even sure any more.

    Every time I fall in love
    Dear diary
    Did something wrong, made a mistake
    Dear diary
    Words fall like raindrops,
    Splattering down upon your
    Waiting pages.

    My dear diary,
    I cannot express this feeling
    As how can love be truly worded?




    Submitted on 2008-03-22 20:23:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "Every time I fall in love
    Dear diary
    Did something wrong, made a mistake
    Dear diary
    Words fall like raindrops,
    Splattering down upon your
    Waiting pages."

    I love that stanza. The image of pages 'in waiting' for your rants of love and sadness and such..is very good.

    I like this piece a lot..Although I don't write in a diary any longer, I understand what you mean, love is definetely hard to describe in words, but..it can be done..Anywho, great piece, I don't see anything wrong.. Have a good one!

    KiTTen^_^
    | Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by rainbowXrazors | [ Reply to This ]


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