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    Author: Brianna_rose
    ASL Info:    14
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 11/13/11
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    You're suffacated, no air to breath; no room to move.
    Thoughts of sorrow, fleaing your mind.
    You Feel like letting go.
    The coffins going under, your skeletal body, dissapearing from sight.

    I hold in my tears, with all my might.
    Dirts covering your body now.
    What was left of you, is now gone.
    Flowers flowing over your tombstone.
    Memories dissapearing.
    My mind is empty, my skin is cold.
    My hearts beating more slowly.

    Now that you're gone, I'm dead.

    I miss you.




    Submitted on 2008-03-22 21:36:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I hold in my tears, with all my might."
    and
    "My mind is empty, my skin is cold."

    Just two absolutely beautiful lines with so much meaning in so few words. Loss of a loved one is such a painful thing.
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Aethyx | [ Reply to This ]
      'now that you're gone i'm dead'

    this kind of follows one of my lyrics. i say "i don't think i'll be able to rest peacefully after you do".

    now i know what it's gonna feel like.
    | Posted on 2008-03-23 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]


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