Lethal Giant by Mister Fizzle

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Submission Name: Lethal Giant dots

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Author:	Mister Fizzle
ASL Info:	32/M/Hell in a Handbasket
Elite Ratio:	5.41 - 751/760/175
Words:	104

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	218
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	593

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good to see not everything changes. glad this site is still around.

Lethal Giant dots

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I take small breaths
so not to shake the trees,
unnerve the leaves or blow down houses.

I walk a little soft
so not to quake the ground.

I’ve been known to
chill rooms with a mood
and a gaze so

you know I keep it to myself.

Don’t want to shiver the world.

But I’m so lethal sometimes
I could destroy every good thing in my wake
And wear a freezing smile in the midst of that destruction.

Frightening.
Dog’s and babies shy away.

Submitted on 2008-03-22 23:27:00 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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just when i was lamenting the sad and unforgivably unnoticed loss of some of my favorite sources of inspiration on this site, here you are with another excellent piece. what's so striking here (and come to think of it, your work in general) is how concisely spoken your sentiments are. i really wish this wasn't a big ball of gush, but i loved every particle of this - from the micro to the macro perspective you give to your readers that fully encompasses the reason why this piece is called "lethal giant", to the underpinning humane quality of inner turmoil at the consequences of unchecked passions we have on others. perhaps that's not even your real point in all of this, but bottom line? i found a lot to take away from this and mull over in menacing quiet moonlit nights spent at the bitter frost of the ocean shoreline. so a fave. :)

~Blue
| Posted on 2008-03-23 00:00:00 | by blueorchids | [ Reply to This ]
this is awesome and i find so many things within the imagery... prolly not things you intended to be there but thats what i do best it seems.

the first stanza... the little breaths... makes me think of the three little pigs and the huff and puff and blow your house down... almost like the wolf is refraining from living out the destiny that fairytales have created him...

and after reading the second stanza i got to thinking maybe you were writing this about god. i know thats weird of me but theres this part in the old testament where someone wanted to see god and they were hidden in this cave thing and there was an earthquake and a storm but god wasnt in any of those things and then i think there was a still small voice and god was in it or something [i feel i may have blurred two stories together there though]

but then i reread the title [im really bad at titles] and realised that this piece is really about a giant who is trying not to be what it seems he is... he is trying not to be lethal but i guess sometimes you cannot help what/who you are...

...it must be awful lonely sometimes though...

its good to have you back mister fizzle
| Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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