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    dots Submission Name: Fireflies of Bora Boradots
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    Author: Imadjinn
    ASL Info:    17/M/Neverwhere
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 340/348/146
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 985
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 961



    Description:
       I went to a concert on the 20th, and much to my surprise, the lead Gig (Jason Webley) wanted us to write a song, and then perform it.

    I'm happy the guys at Sauced let us stay that late, eat there if you're ever in OKC


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    dotsFireflies of Bora Boradots
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    The fireflys of Bora Bora
    shining bright tonight
    the Blind Eyed albino man
    told me so

    The Sky is raining bicycles
    come and join the fight
    I'm 39 tonight
    I ought to know

    In a van with a really swell band
    driving all the way from Dallas
    to Oklahoma City, it sure was pretty
    as aurora's borealis

    They say a twister can't be tamed
    no a twister can't be tamed
    Sisters man your cannons
    Brothers take your aim

    The fireflys of Bora Bora
    shining bright tonight
    the Blind Eyed albino man
    told me so

    The Sky is raining bicycles
    come and join the fight
    I'm 39 tonight
    I ought to know

    They say a twister can't be tamed
    no a twister can't be tamed
    Sisters man your cannons
    Brothers take your aim




    Submitted on 2008-03-22 23:51:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I always felt it was hard to show people lyrics when they haven't actually heard the song. It's almost like giving them half a painting and wanting them to see the genius of your masterpiece. Often they don't get the vision.

    That being said I think the lyrics here are really intriguing and strong. Strong enough to make me want to hear the song. The imagery is very "reggae/traditional" adn thats how I picture the song sounding in my head. Like folk type guitars and a slow to moderate tempo. I don't know though I'd like to hear it.

    Good Job.


    KAM
    | Posted on 2008-03-23 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]


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