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    dots Submission Name: Ressurectiondots
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    Author: chrls
    ASL Info:    43/m/louisiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 43/56/16
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.3333
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    Ressurect this living being from the ashes of what was once an existence called life.

    Life-
    distorted
    twisted
    deformed by self indulgence

    Given something to cherish
    Only to abuse, use and confuse

    What was given
    No longer recognizable
    Broken and malformed through blinded hedonism.

    Rise up!
    Rise up!
    Acknowledge the mistreatment of something meant to be so pure, but now scarred and marred.

    Ressurection?
    It can be.
    It must come from within.

    Dismiss selfishness and disregard for truth and right.

    Step out of the darkness and into the light.
    The light that always shines-
    Has shined
    Will shine

    Ressurection-
    Want it
    Need it
    Believe it
    Be it

    Rebirth

    Peace+




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      i do performance poetry with a clarinetist...

    this would sound so good with accompaniment--

    it is not only smooth, but has a great message...

    we have to be our own Phoenix..no one else can help us rise from the ashes...we have to recognize we are heading in the wrong direction and u-turn on our own...

    the rebirth has to come from within...

    nice piece

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-04-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I had to read a couple of times before i could full understand the meaning -im rather an ammateur still at deducing poetry but anyway, i realised that the first line began with

    "Ressurect this living being from the ashes of what was once an existence called life"

    I like the phrase "Resurrect this living" - it gives a cool form of irony.
    Im not sure if this poem brings meaning to a form of literary rebirth as in to the context of religious ciew or a form of metaphor to a change in oneself(the living and not necessarily the dead).

    But i agree - life is taken for granted((if i had correctly deduced the meaning of ;

    "Life-
    distorted
    twisted
    deformed by self indulgence

    Given something to cherish
    Only to abuse, use and confuse

    What was given
    No longer recognizable
    Broken and malformed through blinded hedonism." ))


    One thing for sure, and i mean it sincerely - although the number of words are minimal, it certainly the poem has alot of impact.
    | Posted on 2008-03-25 00:00:00 | by rosesrouges | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it, the poem reads like a performance piece, I can see someone on stage doing this poem.

    The Poor man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-03-24 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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