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    dots Submission Name: Wanderer's Lamentdots
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    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 89/90/40
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 721
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    Description:
       Something a little song-ish


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    dotsWanderer's Lamentdots
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    The sun is setting in the sky
    Cometh the autumn moon
    Dance beneath the constalks so high
    Winter is coming soon

    Prance around the fireplace tonight
    See the coming of snow
    Basking in the pale grey moonlight
    Nature is letting go

    No one else I'd spend this time with
    This moment is perfect
    Sitting with you, sweetest Judith
    My life, you deserve it

    Passing through this town I met you
    You know I can not stay
    Promised to another. t'is true
    Maybe it's better this way

    Know my heart will always stay here
    With you, frozen in time
    In the morning I'll leave, my dear
    One day I'll make you mine.




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      im pretty sure you know the story or persephone and hades, well thats what your poem made me think of. how she would leave at the end of every summer and the cold and death of fall and winter would come. good write.
    | Posted on 2010-12-15 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]


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