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    dots Submission Name: Mad Gone Alicedots
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    Author: Syn
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 88/89/66
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 74
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    Description:
       it's going on the premise of Lewis Carroll's opium habit actually bringing his imagined character to life.


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    dotsMad Gone Alicedots
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    Crying Alice weaves and wanders
    Crazed by acid dreams that haunt her
    No rabbits left for her to ponder
    "Child, your apron strings are loose!"


    Broken Alice talks and mumbles
    She barely walks without a stumble
    The opium caused her mind to jumble
    "Child, just take a look at yourself!"

    {Pretty Alice, pretty no more
    Alice turned into a whore
    To fuck away that keyless door
    "Child, you're talking to a tree!"


    Years ago, her author passed
    Granting her the will to last
    Unto her, his spell's been cast
    "Child, watch out for that hole!"



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      this is really [censored]in' great. the rhyme scheme is so fantastic and it's such an interesting take on alice in wonderland. seriously, that movie was one big trip. but yeah, i liked it a lot. ...
    | Posted on 2008-03-24 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]


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