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    dots Submission Name: break///devoureddots

    Author: Ceyx
    Elite Ratio:    5.69 - 111/107/81
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/I am dead inside
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    I feel this inside of me///
          it rattles
                I'm broken.
          I beg-
                on bended knee
    I ask you take all that's inside of me...

    It's poison///
          you'll choke
                It seems I have misspoke-
          I try.
                Did he?
    I give you all that lies within...

    The seed of the fruit that has tempted so many
          The core of the syn that has tempted aplenty
    The juices that make the most full's mouth water
          The father, the son, holy-spirit, and slaughter

    What lies in the center; the void///
          It's absent
                I'm hollow.
                            you'll scatter to the wind
    And I will most assuredly follow...


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      the rattle of seeds in your hollow shell, mmm i love how you use the spaces as well as the words. baby doll i love it

    huggs and and ...drugs
    | Posted on 2008-03-26 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      I really love your poems. They really speak out to me and i understand them. Some poems i read they seem like the writer had to force the words to come out, but your poems seem to just flow so natuarlly. And the creativity you put into every line and how it's set up really makes the reader interact with the poem, this i have to say is one of my favorite written by you so far.

    Great Job Ceyx ^_^

    | Posted on 2008-03-25 00:00:00 | by WhY-dO-yOu-CrY | [ Reply to This ]

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