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    dots Submission Name: Hands, Gates and Witches burning.dots
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    Author: ira
    ASL Info:    19.f.ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.18 - 226/261/167
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 79
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    dotsHands, Gates and Witches burning.dots
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    She looked at me, my mind escaped
    As words were said, all laid
    Dead.
    We, were found, far off the scale
    We held hands over those gates,
    But there we left those memories on
    Hand.
    Left the seals of lips kissed zero.
    We, fell hard, burned faster as
    Kisses, witches on light
    The burning tomb.
    Coming out like a cat eye scratched
    Ripped through.
    Coming out like a wind storm, tornado,
    A kaleidoscope glare,
    Skin upon flesh, bones glowing red.
    She looked at me, I lost myself,
    Symbolic retribution fell out of self,
    She looked at me, love drenched in
    Fear.
    Witches for burning, come find me
    Here. At gates with eyes scratched
    Close, with hand in hand I’ll hold.
    She looked at me,
    My mind escaped.
    Coming out of the closet; I’m finally awake.




    Submitted on 2008-03-24 23:31:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i'm assuming this is trying to say it was a nightmare or something,
    and when you're in your sleep and there is nothing but your emotions and images,
    it is very overpowering.
    and that is what makes it what it is,
    so i think that this could have been described or continued a lot more.
    don't get me wrong, you got details in there, but i felt like there was a gap somewhere.

    Peace<3

    <bleedingtears>
    | Posted on 2008-03-25 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]



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