Rage is an emotion that it seems is hard to express but you showed it so gracefully. Why is it that it seems the person we care bout always does things to hurt us? Why does life have to be so hard? So many questions that need to be answered. But letting it out helps. I feel your pain and I hope things turn around for the better.
i really liked the rage that was in this, pure madness, and it was very well arranged and organized. it read easily from beginning to end with no hang ups, easy to understand and the message was clear. well done and thnx for sharing this!!
This is a very beautiful form of expression it's solid too b/c you stuck with a 2-4 set up.You seemed pissed off and fed up with this person.This made me feel as though I enjoyed reading it very much.If you did not have that set up you would have bored me.It made me feel this way b/c of the thought of ppl who take advantage of others who's kindness is tooken for weakness."I won't sit here for another day while you steal parts from me." That grabbed me and you established great timing with those lines.This is a piece I can read more than twice.
You had a two way street with the lines: "I bet you won't air that confession and you know God was'nt there" Could have been this way (I bet you would'nt dare air that confession if you knew that God was there.) Your way of putting it is little off b/c you brought it to the reader differently than just being flat out, but you still have a marvellous poem here.I can also see that in this poem the person your referring to, you have more power than they do which is b/c you reveal them so honestly with the doors of obscurity.I even enjoyed studying this piece.This is so tough b/c I don't know whether to give you 4.5stars or a golden 5.