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    dots Submission Name: Scribbled in the Margin of a Balanced Equationdots
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    Author: ARoomOfMyOwn
    ASL Info:    18/Female/N/A
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 6/9/7
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 858
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    Description:
       Literally, this was scribbled in the margin of a worksheet on balanced equations. Ironic seeing as this particular equation is far from balanced...


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    dotsScribbled in the Margin of a Balanced Equationdots
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    And it seems so strange
    That with every passing second,
    Every stroke of every hand
    Wound tight to the clock in the next room,
    With every breath; you grow farther from me.

    In my mind's eye, I can trace the contours of your face,
    My fingers trailing over every dip,
    Every peak like they used to when you were sleeping
    On my floor or some couch we borrowed for an hour.
    You said you slept better with my breathing, and I'd sing you a song you'd never hear.

    But parts of your face are missing.
    I know every bow of your lips, but your cheeks...

    ...your cheeks were less hollow, and your brow less pronounced.
    Somedays, whole pieces of you are missing.

    I can't find your arms, but I can feel your hands.
    The exact shade of your eye's brown escapes me,
    and the texture of your hair isn't quite right.

    The next time I see you it will be a fresh page,
    For in these last passages, our book is written in ink of apathy and neglect,
    Time and impatience.
    But the right ending just won't come.




    Submitted on 2008-03-25 00:35:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice title, which is why i clicked on this. you do a very good job here acquainting us with the object of your affection. i think you could delve even depper into this, bu you've got an excellent piece here.

    peace,love and all that other junk,

    joe
    | Posted on 2008-05-01 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely done. The title made me click on this. You've done a terrific job here.
    | Posted on 2008-03-25 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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