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    dots Submission Name: Cappuccino and Menthol Cigarettesdots
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    Author: Syn
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 88/89/66
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 109
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsCappuccino and Menthol Cigarettesdots
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    do you remember?
    cappuccinos for free
    underneath the pine tree
    every single friday
    just you and me

    with no fear of danger
    chain-smoking under-agers
    every single friday
    hitch a ride with a stranger

    do you remember?
    outcasts on the inside
    religion can't decide
    every single friday
    the kids in black would play outside

    DO YOU REMEMBER???

    graffiti on the table
    cursive in my notebook
    dropping pills and kissing boys
    make out with each other for money

    flashing random passersby
    running from the bank patrol
    pool cues, pictures and nine inch nails
    somewhere between cloves and valiums
    we found everything we became

    every single friday
    outside the christian cafe


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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the irony of the last line, hehe. Not sure if the X-tain cafe was ever ready for Goth, and your long and fun list of evildoing!

    Sheesh, I think I have a few $$$ around here somewhere . . .



    Thanks for sharing this one!

    Michael
    | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by Vancrown | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting. I think that you did quite well at putting the reader right there with you in the memories. It sounds to me almost as though you have lost the best friend that you experienced this with and that it is perhaps a turning point in the authors life. It is sad and a bit lonely but definately has a wealth of feeling to it. Bravo.

    xoxo
    | Posted on 2008-03-26 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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