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    dots Submission Name: Eskimo Dreamsdots
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    Author: laffeytaffey
    ASL Info:    21/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    1.77 - 21/15/7
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I fell asleep during Spanish 2 class and this is the poem that came from it. Thank you Mrs. Albers!


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    dotsEskimo Dreamsdots
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    Came out of nowhere

    This daydream.

    Total boredom will do that

    I suppose.



    Such intensity

    In those chocolate eyes

    Of yours.



    Together

    We are one.

    And separated

    Just lost

    And confused.



    Desire

    Rages through our

    Mind

    Body

    And soul.



    Such intensity

    In those chocolate eyes

    Of yours.



    Passion

    Is aroused.

    Too much to hold in

    Any longer.



    Such intensity

    In those chocolate eyes

    Of yours.



    Suddenly

    I'm snapped back

    Into reality.



    So lost.

    So confused.

    Again.



    My subconscious

    Must be wanting

    To tell me something.





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      awww...wow!! cute poem.
    | Posted on 2008-04-01 00:00:00 | by being me | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey mishy! I remember this poem. I actually keep the copy you gave me that day a long time ago in my wallet. I love it. I love it just as much now as I did when I first read it hon. I love you! (LILY lol) haha. Ms. Albers. now words for that woman. no words. I hated that class.... GRRRRRReat job! mmmm. chocolate eyes....ha. you should be calling back in a few minutes. ironic? I think not. Ok, this wasn't much of a critique, but you know that the love is there.

    Meghan

    O.Y. inference from the title, ha! victory is mine. Finally know who that is poem is about. Odd who it turned out to be. "eskimo" *laughs out loud*
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Draumrkopa | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting, intriguing and just a tad arcane..."chocolate eyes" is an excellent poetic touch... I liked this poem muchly.... bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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