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    dots Submission Name: goodbyedots
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    Author: sweetme16
    ASL Info:    18/f/who cares
    Elite Ratio:    2.21 - 108/251/162
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 158
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 653



    Description:
       this is complecated. its written about a situation that i have recently found myself in. I had to breakup with my boyfriend today who i love very very much. our families are very diffrent and it would hurt my parents very much if they knew how far our "friendship" had gone. So its best for us to end things now without anyone else getting hurt.


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    dotsgoodbyedots
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    i look back at you

    standing there all alone

    looking like you just had had the shock of your life

    i think of the talk that we'd just had

    how hard it had been for me to say those things to you

    and how painful it was to see the hurt in your eyes

    i try and ignore what you said about how much you love me

    and remember what i'm doing this for

    so i start walking away and then stop at the door

    turning around one last time

    i look at you and wisper

    "goodbye"





    Submitted on 2008-03-26 00:37:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      How touching and how profoundly beautiful! The pain and sadness literally reverberate from this. Nicely done, Preeti!
    | Posted on 2008-03-26 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      You make me wanna call the paramedic for the person in this poem. this is a good write.
    I like it. I'm just glad its not me.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-03-26 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Ouch! A knife in the heart! too many of us can identify with the business end of that "knife"... splendidly and very deftly done! (I feel the pain from here!!! Yikes!) bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-03-26 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]



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