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    dots Submission Name: The Herd and the Abyssdots
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    Author: FallenGrace
    ASL Info:    29 already?/m/ga
    Elite Ratio:    5.67 - 360/375/90
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Herd and the Abyssdots
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    Plodding herd,
    trudging higher through muddy terrain,
    filthy and hopeless.
    Once they were clean.
    They were so very fast,
    Electric
    Dashing double-time.
    45º and climbing, still
    the herd was relentless.
    No mountaintop,
    no roadblock,
    no horizon in sight,
    unto the arms of Helios they did fly.
    Though fighting insolation
    with each landing of hoof,
    yet they were the corona
    that moved the world.

    “Naphtha, oh Naphtha”
    cries the rancher
    whose herd will not return.
    Though it was he that set them forth
    with prod and combustible remains.
    Sight now obscured with muck
    plodding ever forward
    slower and heavier,
    and the abyss,
    hidden for a century,
    is approaching.
    The herd cannot stop.
    Kinetic pride driving them,
    though muscles strain
    and burdens grow
    still they push forward
    up to the edge and over
    and with them they carry
    the light
    the spirit
    the home and the hearth
    into the darkness.




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    Plodding herd, trudging
    Ever higher through muddy terrain, and the
    Abyss is approaching.
    Kinetic pride driving them
    Onward, forward
    Into the darkness.
    Light left behind
    In pursuit of Helios.
    Springing forth like corona,
    The sword of God
    Has swung.
    Entropy envelopes and
    Devours, though once they had
    Energy to move the world.
    Slower the hoofs move,
    The herd stumbling into the
    Ravine of negritude.
    Unable now to heed the
    Call of the rancher who set them loose.
    They cannot stop, they cannot hear, and
    Into the abyss they plummet.
    Only the words of the forsaken remain:
    Naptha, oh Naptha!




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