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    dots Submission Name: Love Trialsdots
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    Author: Aangskate
    ASL Info:    15/female/lame
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 90/79/21
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 136
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    Bytes: 763



    Description:
       This poem was written for my two good friends, much in love, but certainly not perfect. Who is?
    I wish the best you two! Love you Brandon and Jillian.
    <3 Harriet


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    dotsLove Trialsdots
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    He's sick of the crying
    and all of the lying.
    He tries his hardest, but its never enough for her.
    He's trapped like a fish on a lure,
    stuck tight in this quicksand.
    She can no longer stand,
    her knees are weak and her heart sore.
    He always swore,
    he'd never let go,
    but no ones perfect.
    They are both hurting,
    "He's always lying."
    she says, but she just stopped trying.
    Bit by bit he is dying,
    trying to be so much better.
    Now look at them, they are this much greater.
    Their love growing steadily,
    and now their ready,
    to take on what love throws at them.
    They are unshakeable
    and unbreakable.




    Submitted on 2008-03-26 14:51:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like your poems! they're a kind of talish i get a sort of portay in my head when i read them. but 'their' should be 'they're' [Their love growing steadily, and now their ready, to take on what love throws at them.] keep up =]
    | Posted on 2008-06-29 00:00:00 | by bannathebanana | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2008-04-17 00:00:00 | by shadow of death | [ Reply to This ]
      Jeebas, you write allot of sad things. I like it, I'm not really into happy poems but I can't seem to write anything sad, lol. The ending was awesome! And the rhyming was great. There should be an apostrophe in "it's" considering the way it is used in this poem.
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Coripa | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks Harriet...it really is a good peom...and thanks for dedicating it to us...it means a lot and the peom itself is very beautiful and flows perfectly. I dont know how things are going to work out in my relationship, but I wont give up...no matter how hard and how rough it is...I'll try not to give up...*hugs you tightly* Please give me support though, it is hard and sometimes I need some help too...
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Aion Kiori | [ Reply to This ]
      This is quite a piece of work. It sounds familiar in a sense but I'm not sure why. In some cases I can relate to it but I think you wanted that. You did ask me to read this one. Which makes me cautious on why.. but you did a good job on this one. It had a sort of rhythem to it and flowed quite nicely. An I should learn to read descriptions better since I just saw it a few seconds ago. That's really sweet of you to make this poem for us. I don't know what to say. I thought it was supposed to be about us I just didn't want to sound conceated. Thanks Harriet. I'm glad I can be a good friend for you and I'm sure Brandon appreciates this poem as well even if he hasn't read it yet since he's never online anymore. Which gets annoying slightly especially when you wanna talk to him badly. But thank you Harriet so much for the poem. You really are a lovely person with an amazing personality. *hugs*
    | Posted on 2008-03-26 00:00:00 | by Fallyn Angel | [ Reply to This ]


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