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    dots Submission Name: Hush Now Timedots

    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 688
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    dotsHush Now Timedots

    Ends, no ends, no fretting nor fear
    The old steps of past tears turn past tense and disappear
    No fear my sweetness, my tender look here
    Here is my love with my heart and my care
    The weight of a feather is this passion of truth
    It is you and I with the spirits divine
    Hush now time donít you turn another page
    To be, to stay completely engaged
    Paired as one on this day that love came.

    © 2008 MatthewMPCNZ

    Submitted on 2008-03-26 19:47:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was awesome! I was listening to Pink Floyd's "Money" on my walkman & as odd as "IT" may seem - the music went well for me because I was thinking of my brother who died and he loved PF and poetry
    A fav! A Fav!
    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      i really got into this.. and your reference to the "spirits divine" was by far the most interesting part...nice word choice through out the entire thing...it was not what i expected...most poems about love seem to have the same flow but yours changed it up and it worked very well...
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by suicidalacts72 | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaah, yes! Love! It stops time and distance, and seems ethereal in its' nature! You have captured the instant and essence of love in your excellent poem! Nice work, Matt!
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow! This is incredibly beautiful! .... Not a single irrelevant word, this poem is a model of artistic precision. You are right, love transcends time, love transcends all limits so effortlessly as if they are invisible.

    Very, very beautiful... I love it from the title to the last word and beyond........
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]

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