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    dots Submission Name: Trust me Love I am always heredots
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    Author: bas
    ASL Info:    24/f/somewhere...
    Elite Ratio:    4.94 - 42/48/35
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTrust me Love I am always heredots
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    “Trust me love I am always here.”

    “When fear has gripped you,
    you must only feel the delicate
    drops of rain against your skin
    and I shall cleanse you; and bless you

    When you feel caged in, gasping for air
    know that I am the freedom of the wind.
    You only need to open your heart to me and I will
    become an open field for you.

    When you feel abandoned, secluded, alone
    feel the warmth of the sun against your skin,
    for it is my comfort and my embrace
    sent unto you"


    "You must know that
    I am
    within you and all around you.
    Without you I am nothing -
    and within you I am everything,
    my love for you
    is the source of my existence.
    Realize!
    You, are cherished, a perfect petal on the wind”




    Submitted on 2008-03-27 02:50:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This poem is relaxing,almost soothing. The words used feel smooth and gentle working well for this piece. I have to ask though,why the quote marks? It seems like you put different poems together or is that just me?

    "Let me kiss away your tears wash away your sorrowLet me mend your broken bones and heal your bleeding wounds"

    This part seemed out of place with the rest of the poem,it seems to separate the first two stanzas with the last completely.

    I liked this line in your poem "for it is my comfort and my embrace sent unto you" it gives the sense of somehow someone looking over you.
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by tOXIC_wAST3 | [ Reply to This ]



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