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    dots Submission Name: The Lost Shipdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsThe Lost Shipdots
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    I steered her through the Java Sea
    Well guided by some avatar,
    Past fluted piers of porphyry,
    Into calm bays at Malabar.

    We sail while yet the Moon is high
    With silver dust on every spar,
    And well I know the Moon’s lone eye
    From here to distant Zanzibar.

    And polished is the hull and hold,
    My ship's prow carved of ebony,
    My rails all teak and worked with gold,
    The sails as white as ivory.

    My crew, their eyes as black as coal
    Wait ever at the mast and rail
    We sail the seas from Pole to Pole
    Our flesh so cold and deathly pale.

    Ah, we have sailed so long, so far,
    Across the midnight bone-white foam,
    Beneath a dark and evil star,
    That leads us on, but never home.




    Submitted on 2008-03-27 07:44:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW, I really enjoyed this write. It had a few typos, but I got the message.
    This write gave me the vision of lost yet found. Look forward to reading more of your work.

    Blessed be

    illusions
    | Posted on 2008-03-28 00:00:00 | by illusions35904 | [ Reply to This ]
      very interesting... very interesting indeed...
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent! The stuff of a midshipman's nightmares, this ship that journeys relentlessly, but never home! Many a sailor must have awakened in a cold sweat, with this nightmare fresh on his mind!

    Another outstanding, mythical and ghostly tale of the Sea by the master himself!!!
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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