once again, you have done a great job in communicating those graphic images :) it was simple/easy to read and rhyme and understand, short and to the point, i likes it a lot! i just wonder what the last part would have sounded like if you had said...
I can't escape
These voices in my head
I'm tearing out my hair
I wish I was dead"
it seemed to make it transition easier to the last line, but what do i know :) anyway, peace and good job!!!!!