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    dots Submission Name: Anna Anestheticsdots

    Author: Aethyx
    ASL Info:    14/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 25/23/15
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       It kinda makes you think, what else is there if you can't cry, and you can't die, and you can't feel. You just blend in with the background.

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    dotsAnna Anestheticsdots

    I wish that I'd just die
    I wish that I could cry
    The razor's disappeared
    And the tears have run dry

    No where to turn
    No one to listen
    Betrayed by the tears
    That once softly glistened

    It feels like I'm fading
    Slipping away
    I'm almost gone now
    Nothing left to say

    Blending in the background
    Just like everyone else
    I'm not who I was once
    I'm just not myself

    These drugs have morphed me
    And now I'm addicted
    What else could I do
    To stop the pain you inflicted

    I can't escape
    These voices in my head
    I'm tearing my hair out
    I wish I was dead

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      once again, you have done a great job in communicating those graphic images :) it was simple/easy to read and rhyme and understand, short and to the point, i likes it a lot! i just wonder what the last part would have sounded like if you had said...

    I can't escape
    These voices in my head
    I'm tearing out my hair
    I wish I was dead"

    it seemed to make it transition easier to the last line, but what do i know :) anyway, peace and good job!!!!!

    | Posted on 2008-03-28 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]

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