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    dots Submission Name: Spiderdots
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    Author: KimmyMim
    ASL Info:    47 Female New England
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 170/211/66
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 86
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 791



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       Geez...some days are just easier to care for than others...


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    “Stop tugging at my web!”
    said the Spider to the child.
    “I’m losing all direction
    and the chickens have gone wild.

    "The husband keeps on losing sense
    while banks are caving in.
    The eldest is convulsing
    so her mind is in a spin.

    "The boy is holding tightly
    to the temples of his head.
    Another day of sunlight
    cannot pull him from his bed.

    "My tangled web keeps breaking
    so I’m mending all the time.
    I cannot play with dolls today,
    'cause then I'll lose my mind.

    "Someday I think you'll understand
    my sweetest little bug.
    But ‘til you do, I’m asking you,
    to just give me a hug."




    Submitted on 2008-03-27 11:50:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is actually pretty ingenue!

    it took me a minute to 'get' that the bulk of the poem is a quote from the spider to the child.

    it says a lot about everyday life, but then you can also take it in a more abstract manner.

    'chickens' does not need that apostrophe, btw.
    nice work- i'll definitely come back.
    ~Syn
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Syn | [ Reply to This ]


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