Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Heroina de Hotel dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Aethyx
    ASL Info:    14/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 25/23/15
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 682
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 706



    Description:
       I got the idea from Hotel Heroine. I just stareted thinking about the title, and basically came up with this.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsHeroina de Hotel dots
    -------------------------------------------


    Tearing rotten wall paper
    Peeling off the walls
    Blood stained carpet
    Runs down the halls

    With no where to go
    Here I reside
    It shelters my addiction
    It's a place I can hide

    Long lonely nights
    Needle in hand
    Toxins in my veins
    My wish -- It's command

    I've been here for years
    I'm rotting away
    Wasted my life
    What can I say?

    When I checked in
    I overlooked on fact
    You can never leave
    There's no going back

    I claw at the doors
    But I'm trapped within
    A place I call
    Hotel Heroine




    Submitted on 2008-03-27 11:52:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      It is a fantasic peice of writing i have to admit.
    The concept though is a lil.. odd.
    there aint no such thing as a Hotel Heroine but i like the way you made it seem like there is.

    -Yvonne
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by YvonneJoyce | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a nice piece of work you have here but I really don't want to think about wtf the concept came from.
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    159534

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    A Sense Of Things written by Daniel Barlow
    Beauty Rest written by jackz
    Meaningless Meanings written by ForgottenGraves
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    The World written by jjd
    To the Artist written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Twin Intercept written by Daniel Barlow
    A bit of Pain written by teika5
    Lost Inside the Race written by ForgottenGraves
    Vortex: The Imagination That Is written by KeeperOfLight
    Day 6 written by TheStillSilence
    In a Corner written by jeniecel
    Compartments written by TheStillSilence
    Adoration written by TheStillSilence
    Live In Between written by teika5
    The Curtain Call written by faideddarkness
    Deep written by Janesaddiction
    Verse: written by Daniel Barlow
    Mystery Read written by kyserin
    Relentless. The Visceral Fracture. written by Daniel Barlow
    Night- time written by Daniel Barlow
    Honeymoon written by TheStillSilence
    Hyle written by endlessgame23
    Sword in the Water written by Wolfwatching
    Starseed written by endlessgame23
    The Abyss of Love written by poetotoe
    Delicious Stews written by elephantasia
    (Untitled Song) written by TeslaKoyal
    Things They (Don't) Say written by TheStillSilence

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry