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    dots Submission Name: Heroina de Hotel dots
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    Author: Aethyx
    ASL Info:    14/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 25/23/15
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 748
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    Bytes: 706



    Description:
       I got the idea from Hotel Heroine. I just stareted thinking about the title, and basically came up with this.


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    dotsHeroina de Hotel dots
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    Tearing rotten wall paper
    Peeling off the walls
    Blood stained carpet
    Runs down the halls

    With no where to go
    Here I reside
    It shelters my addiction
    It's a place I can hide

    Long lonely nights
    Needle in hand
    Toxins in my veins
    My wish -- It's command

    I've been here for years
    I'm rotting away
    Wasted my life
    What can I say?

    When I checked in
    I overlooked on fact
    You can never leave
    There's no going back

    I claw at the doors
    But I'm trapped within
    A place I call
    Hotel Heroine




    Submitted on 2008-03-27 11:52:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It is a fantasic peice of writing i have to admit.
    The concept though is a lil.. odd.
    there aint no such thing as a Hotel Heroine but i like the way you made it seem like there is.

    -Yvonne
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by YvonneJoyce | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a nice piece of work you have here but I really don't want to think about wtf the concept came from.
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]


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