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    dots Submission Name: davey...dots
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    Author: suicidalacts72
    ASL Info:    20/f/WI
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 189/150/69
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsdavey...dots
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    as the blood thickens
    and the tears fall
    in the dirt she lays
    broken
    shattered
    to her rescue he comes
    gleamming so vibrent
    a mist surrounds
    invading her hidden thoughts
    her wrongs now righted
    his needle and thread
    rushing blood
    now clotted
    he loves her
    love heals all
    together as one
    in perfect harmony they dance
    on the moons gentle beams
    kissed by fate
    they met
    and never shall part...




    Submitted on 2008-03-27 14:21:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      excellent poem. the imagery of the mending of the heart and past was perfect! thank you for sharing.
    ali
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]


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