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    dots Submission Name: Velcro Mandots
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    Author: Imadjinn
    ASL Info:    17/M/Neverwhere
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 340/348/146
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 866
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 926



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       And the tour headed to New Jersey...


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    dotsVelcro Mandots
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    here I am, I'm on my own
    I'm unattached, I'm all alone
    I've traveled the world from Moscow to Flint
    my only companions are dust and lint.

    Velcro Man, Velcro Man
    Shoop Shoop Shoop Shoop
    Shoobibity Bop bop

    I've searched so far, and I've searched so wide
    for the man who wears my other side
    you bring the credits, I've got the looks
    Oh how i dream of your miniscule hooks

    Velcro Man, Velcro Man
    Shoop Shoop Shoop Shoop
    Shoobibity Bop bop

    NEWS FLASH!
    Rift Divides Foreign Nations!
    Polar Icecaps Breaking Apart!
    Grand Canyon Widening!
    London Bridge is Falling down!
    Frankenstein Dissatisfied with stitches!
    Velcro Man, Where are you?!

    Please bring us all back together
    Please Bring us all back together




    Submitted on 2008-03-27 16:48:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      totally dig this.
    and i agree, as well!
    we need a Velcro Man...
    i had a lil beat in my head as i read this.
    kind of David Bowie vs. Unskinny Bop.
    good job, man.
    ~Syn
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Syn | [ Reply to This ]


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