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    dots Submission Name: Forgive and Forgetdots
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    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
    Total Views: 954
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1660



    Description:
       life. isn't it fun? This is just an angst kinda thing, when life gives you words to throw this is how they end up. Well in my case. So take it as you will, I wish it were fiction.

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    dotsForgive and Forgetdots
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    @@c-So what do you do,
    with mistakes you know were right?
    What do you do,
    with things that seem to bite?
    bite at my brain
    my state of mind
    the things I find so comfortable
    the things I love. enjoy.

    This is simple
    put them in your head
    Put them in your pocket
    make them go away
    forgive forget, right?

    No,
    Nothing is simple in life
    and mistakes never go away
    Sex, Drugs, Alcohol can't leave.

    You're only a virgin once.
    You never cheat twice.
    Guilt hangs, until truth revealed.

    This is teen angst,
    Never been so much fun!?
    now it's heart ache.
    Never fun.

    "I love you" rings a bell
    and "I miss you" strikes a nerve.
    but "I told him" kills my heart.

    I know it's over for good
    that was the last time I think.
    I hope you understand.
    Forgive and forget works here.

    Forgive and forget.
    Outlive, outlast.
    It's me I choose to keep.
    it's you I choose to leave.

    Good-bye muse.
    you served me well.
    bus buddies no more
    deceased now.

    So what do you do,
    with mistakes you know were right?
    What do you do,
    with things that seem to fright?
    Fright my brain
    my state of mind
    the things I find so comfortable
    the things I love. enjoy.@@




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      This was written very well. I enjoyed very much and I can relate.

    Keep up the good work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-09-10 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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