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    dots Submission Name: Pretty Little Mindfuckdots
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    Author: Syn
    Elite Ratio:    5.13 - 88/89/66
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 96
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    dotsPretty Little Mindfuckdots
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    pull me, shred me, my imperfect tapestry
    tear me, unweave me, take my gravity
    i've lost my balance on the tip of your tongue
    lost in this eclipse of my inner sun
    burn me, singe me, show me your wordless pain
    melt me, envelop me, shower me with acid rain
    i'm falling, falling off this tower of tears
    i'm burning, burning with indescribable fears
    i wonder how this blade can heal me from the inside
    you swallow me and all my ribbons come untied
    in this micro-orgasm induced insanity
    i lose my touch and escape my vanity
    jinxed and bedraggled, i climb over your lips
    and i jump-
    and i'm falling, falling, again...




    Submitted on 2008-03-28 03:58:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




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      Wow,

    ok i know i start a lot of your comments with wow or amazing, but hey cant fight the truth can ya.

    i love the instensity that you have placed in the poem. the images you placed are nothing short of kickass, its not usual for me to see these kinds of poems, and im glad i finally get to. you have an unbelivable gift hon.
    | Posted on 2008-03-28 00:00:00 | by nikita2u | [ Reply to This ]


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