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    dots Submission Name: Iron and Thunderdots

    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 799
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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    dotsIron and Thunderdots

    Iron and thunder, grim magics calling
    Over the heather and over the fen,
    Iím lost in nightmare, dreaming, falling,
    Awake I dream it again and again!

    Brittle my youth, and all strength is failing,
    And so I move onward, into the fog,
    I hear a sly Siren singing, wailing,
    Who beckons from swamp oaks over the bog.

    She is the cause of my midnight dreaming,
    She is the one with the twice potent charms,
    Her scented hair in the twilight streaming,
    Over her shoulders and long supple arms!

    ďCome to me now, my lone lover always,
    Under the dark stars and over the moor,
    Cross the rivers on dark builded causeways,
    For I alone am your sweet paramour!Ē

    Iron and thunder, grim magics calling
    Over the heather and over the fen,
    Iím lost in nightmare, dreaming and falling,
    Awake I dream it again and again!

    Submitted on 2008-03-28 08:35:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. This was incredible. You have an impeccable sense of rhyming. This piece was combined with incredible imagery, a terrific flow, and wonderful wording. You truly are an amazing writer. I especially love "Iím lost in nightmare, dreaming, falling." The way you wrote those lines was amazing.
    | Posted on 2008-03-29 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaah, those Sirens; those Sirens!!! This one seems to claim slumber as tho part of it belonged to her!!!! Outstanding write, my friend in letters!!!
    | Posted on 2008-03-28 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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