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    dots Submission Name: Razor Bladedots
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    Author: hawkeye
    ASL Info:    20/Female/Kentucky
    Elite Ratio:    2.47 - 9/18/10
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1026
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 998



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    dotsRazor Bladedots
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    What are you going to do
    when no one wants to love you
    You sit alone in your room
    And wonder what went wrong
    What did you do to deserve this torture
    You think and think
    But nothing comes to mind
    What are you to do
    You then begin to think
    Of all the lies you've heard
    The more you think
    The more depressed you become
    Then you think about it
    The thing that has taken away your pain before
    Should you do it
    Or should you not
    No one would know the difference
    It feels like its calling out to you
    Promising to take away the pain
    You then begin to believe
    So as you sit on your bed
    With a tear stained face
    Slowly sliding the razor blade
    Down across your wrist
    You feel somewhat better
    But not all the way
    So you keep doing it
    Till you feel numb to everything and everyone
    So, what do you do now?




    Submitted on 2008-03-28 12:40:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      im well i use to be a cutter to, idk if this pice was about u doing it. but anyway i loved it. i spoked to me in such a way that most poems do not. you have a way with words and the way you worte this one was very nice. i think it was very nice. keep up the good work

    sickofhurting U aka tayla
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by SickOfHurting U | [ Reply to This ]
      Check out the song "crying" by the band sugarcult. This piece reminded me of it alot. Maybe you'd like the song.
    | Posted on 2008-04-06 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad. Tragic. Depressive. Real. Natural flow.

    I loved it. Keep on writing.
    | Posted on 2008-03-30 00:00:00 | by Piper | [ Reply to This ]
      It's so tragic that so many people feel this way. The world is a such a cruel place at times. Though you have to try and look on the brighter side. Your piece perfectly portrays how sometimes it can be hard to see that brighter side. Everything, everyone, hates you. You feel so alone, lost, confused. Writing about it helps, doesn't it? Almost the same form of release as cutting yourself.

    I enjoyed the lack of rhyme in this piece. I feel rhyme would have only seemed forced. It had a great flow, good wording, and came together to be a great piece of writing.
    | Posted on 2008-03-29 00:00:00 | by darkened_soul | [ Reply to This ]


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