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    dots Submission Name: Pinocchiodots
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    Author: Mud
    ASL Info:    18/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 55/89/46
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsPinocchiodots
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    Pinocchio wanted to get a tattoo
    Pinocchio wanted to dye his hair blue

    Pinocchio bought an electric guitar
    Pinocchio became a famous rock star

    Pinocchio pretended to be a nice guy
    But as it turned out, he told many lies

    Pinocchio's nose, it had begun to grow
    Pinocchio began to feel so very low

    Pinocchio decided that he would be good
    But everyone knew he was made out of wood

    Pinocchio sat in his room, and said he,
    "My misfortune is that I'm made out of a tree

    I'll run away and never be seen again
    I'm flying away on the next aeroplane

    I'll be out of sight, and I'll never come back
    I'm putting my things into this purple sack"

    Then days would come, and days would go
    And no one had heard from old Pinocchio

    Our puppet was far from being out of sight,
    Pinocchio was eaten by hungry termites.




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      also.. thanks for reading a totally non-sense posting by me... I was wondering what sort of audience it wud attract..
    | Posted on 2008-04-21 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      Pinocchio decided that he would be good
    But everyone knew he was made out of wood

    too cheesy and lacks a bunch of irony... good and wood.. might seem as though they rhyme..

    rest is quite interesting and the ending is funny in a dark sort of way... I mean u killed of Pinocchio... oh my god...
    u killed Pinocchio...

    (we sud get together sometime and figure out how to kill bunny rabbit....) thats just a sarcasm
    | Posted on 2008-04-21 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      ha! the start is pretty funny, i thought you were gonna go on with that more obvious rock and roll allusions.
    is your poem a comment on rock stars selling out? or just the false nature of people in general?
    and unlike the fairy tale, you end on a very depressing but slightly humerous note. nice!
    | Posted on 2008-03-28 00:00:00 | by andnow | [ Reply to This ]


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