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    Author: Vampiric Death
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    dotsReflectiondots
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    Staring into the proverbial mirror,
    seeing myself as never before.
    I lay bare and my heart is open,
    my soul is torn and begging for more.

    Outward I am happy,
    but inward I am lost.
    Confused as to life,
    ignorant of its cost.

    Openly content,
    internally dark with fear.
    seeking poisoned answers,
    afraid of what I'll hear.




    Submitted on 2008-03-29 01:09:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the third line in the first stanza feels a bit shakey but I like the word use and imagry.
    | Posted on 2008-03-30 00:00:00 | by Jessica Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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