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    dots Submission Name: I hope you'll be heredots
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    Author: Raistlin Sith
    ASL Info:    22/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 106/182/66
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    dotsI hope you'll be heredots
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    I'm utterly alone.
    She's inches from me
    and I'm behind this wall
    I'm unable to see.

    It's all falling apart,
    right at the seams,
    I need to think clearly
    but it's lost to my screams.

    I can't run, I can't hide,
    there's no demon to best,
    All that I do
    is fret without rest.

    It's starting up again,
    these feelings of hate,
    those feelings of sorrow
    seem planted by fate.

    I'm tired of crying
    I don't want to drink,
    I just need a shower
    to wash off this stink.

    The remains of the past,
    and in all that I've failed,
    all of the dreams
    that have since been derailed.

    I'm not moving on
    I'm not letting go,
    I just needed to say this
    and thought you should know.

    Fuck paranoia,
    and all of my fear,
    when I get up tomorrow
    I hope you'll be here.




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      I know how bad it hurts to be shut out from someone. And to just want them to talk to you because you know you can help. I bet you anything though shes working hard to open up. She really, really loves you. And I bet she's really sorry for that weekend. More sorry than you'll ever know. But you weren't ever going to lose her. She promises you that!
    | Posted on 2008-08-27 00:00:00 | by thefragile | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this poem....i myself has been in the position of saying [censored] it all....and i hope that person will be there in the morning....well i hope she was there for you....me and my boyfriend just broke up...so hes far from being ther in the mornin for me. but i hope all is good for you.

    ~kayla~
    | Posted on 2008-04-02 00:00:00 | by lonely goth | [ Reply to This ]


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