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    dots Submission Name: Eye of the Beloveddots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 411
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 897



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       Actually I wrote this one right after Fire Love Flame, just got around to posting it now


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    dotsEye of the Beloveddots
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    Iím your puppet
    Your heartís massage
    Youíre my shadow
    My Love mirage

    Iím your reason
    Your alibi
    Youíre my smile
    Youíre why I cry

    Things are different now
    I still love you
    I still want you
    You must have changed somehow
    Your smile fades
    My heart aches

    I try to draw your attention
    I must look pathetic
    Seems your love is hard to mention
    Why do you regret it?

    Smile for me
    And ease my pain
    It may never be
    The same again

    Drop the act
    Please donít toy with me
    Donít come back
    Or you run away with me

    Say what you mean
    Donít soften your story
    I am not a child
    Donít have to say sorry

    Things may change
    But theyíre still beautiful




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      i'll write a song for this one.
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