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    dots Submission Name: Sleep Wakingdots
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    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.8 - 23/161/138
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 433
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 865



    Description:
       Wow I can't sleep


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    dotsSleep Wakingdots
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    My eyes are closed
    I'm unaware
    I'm in a dream
    And you're not there

    I'm all alone
    But I'm not scared
    I feel so cold
    And I don't care

    I'm hollow inside
    Help me escape
    I feel trapped in time
    Please help me wake

    I've been alone
    For years it seems
    The dream won't end
    Come rescue me

    I want your touch
    I want your smile
    I want you here
    To stay awhile

    Don't leave me alone
    In the night
    Awaken me to
    See the light

    I feel a tug
    I hope it's you
    My senses return
    Awake anew

    My eyes are opened
    I am aware
    I'm in my bed
    And you're not there




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