Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Sleep Wakingdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: BlazeFlamme
    ASL Info:    22/m/TX
    Elite Ratio:    1.81 - 23/160/138
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 418
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 865



    Description:
       Wow I can't sleep


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSleep Wakingdots
    -------------------------------------------


    My eyes are closed
    I'm unaware
    I'm in a dream
    And you're not there

    I'm all alone
    But I'm not scared
    I feel so cold
    And I don't care

    I'm hollow inside
    Help me escape
    I feel trapped in time
    Please help me wake

    I've been alone
    For years it seems
    The dream won't end
    Come rescue me

    I want your touch
    I want your smile
    I want you here
    To stay awhile

    Don't leave me alone
    In the night
    Awaken me to
    See the light

    I feel a tug
    I hope it's you
    My senses return
    Awake anew

    My eyes are opened
    I am aware
    I'm in my bed
    And you're not there




    Submitted on 2008-03-29 07:03:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    159615

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Wavelength written by saartha
    You Make Me speechless written by elephantasia
    Push written by JanePlane
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    Hopelessly Blind written by ForgottenGraves
    The Song on Your Guitar written by SavedDragon
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Bond written by saartha
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    In My Head written by faideddarkness
    Deaf Dumb and Blind is no excuse written by poetotoe
    Wasps written by Wolfwatching
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    Ten Poems written by Wolfwatching
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    Incubus written by monad
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching
    Summer Nights written by ollie_wicked
    To written by SavedDragon
    It's Night Now written by RisingSon
    new moon written by CrypticBard
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Hollow Points written by RequiemOfDreams
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry