[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: To My Sondots

    Author: Khaled AbdAllah
    ASL Info:    22 - male - Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 129/137/30
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 697
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 722

       I'm so happy to write this one after a long time of not writing a line. It is a message for my own son, I liked him to know how I love him. I hope you will all like it.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsTo My Sondots

    The first time I heard you crying;
    And someone announced loudly
    " You have become a father. "
    Somehow I could not imagine
    Myself away of you anymore

    You are the one I waited eagerly;
    To come to my life; to change
    My whole world; to turn my misery
    To a hopeful and a meaningful life.

    You are God's gift sent to me.
    I'll always be here for you and
    Nothing else; I will always be
    A loving and kind father for you.

    So, are you ready to be my eye
    And see the whole world with
    Your own eye. Are you ready
    To stand beside me forever
    As a faithful and loving son ?

    Submitted on 2008-03-29 10:46:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      Hallo there,

    How are you? How is your wife and son? First of all I am very sorry to be late with my comment, but better late than never right!!!

    Now to your poem. I really feel every word you have written. It is a very emotional poem. I like the way you have brought your feelings to the paper. It is more like a "confession" of love to your son.

    You are using very simple words to express yourself but they do leave thier impact on the reader.

    On the whole it is a lovely tale about a fathers feelings for his son. I hope when your son is old enough he will read it.

    This poems shows that you are very proud of your son.

    I really did enjoy reading it as a lot of your poems.

    With love

    | Posted on 2008-03-31 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]