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    dots Submission Name: To My Sondots
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    Author: Khaled AbdAllah
    ASL Info:    22 - male - Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 129/137/30
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
    Total Views: 697
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 722



    Description:
       I'm so happy to write this one after a long time of not writing a line. It is a message for my own son, I liked him to know how I love him. I hope you will all like it.


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    dotsTo My Sondots
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    The first time I heard you crying;
    And someone announced loudly
    " You have become a father. "
    Somehow I could not imagine
    Myself away of you anymore

    You are the one I waited eagerly;
    To come to my life; to change
    My whole world; to turn my misery
    To a hopeful and a meaningful life.

    You are God's gift sent to me.
    I'll always be here for you and
    Nothing else; I will always be
    A loving and kind father for you.

    So, are you ready to be my eye
    And see the whole world with
    Your own eye. Are you ready
    To stand beside me forever
    As a faithful and loving son ?




    Submitted on 2008-03-29 10:46:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hallo there,

    How are you? How is your wife and son? First of all I am very sorry to be late with my comment, but better late than never right!!!

    Now to your poem. I really feel every word you have written. It is a very emotional poem. I like the way you have brought your feelings to the paper. It is more like a "confession" of love to your son.

    You are using very simple words to express yourself but they do leave thier impact on the reader.

    On the whole it is a lovely tale about a fathers feelings for his son. I hope when your son is old enough he will read it.

    This poems shows that you are very proud of your son.

    I really did enjoy reading it as a lot of your poems.

    With love

    Zohra
    | Posted on 2008-03-31 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]


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