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    dots Submission Name: it was a bump and nothing moredots

    Author: rosesrouges
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 32/42/42
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 599
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       credits to dhamirah for the description of bump. so true ( :

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    dotsit was a bump and nothing moredots

    It was a bump - like the fields.
    It was like a pavement - tripped, crawled and fall.
    So small, so bitter yet so overwhelming.
    But still, it was a bump and nothing more.

    The feel was like the mountains - the himalayas.
    The Himalayas.
    So many days passed over and over - swirling like the Katrina.
    Yet, a voice said " a bump. just a bump. and no more".

    Let me jump on it till it falls flat.
    Punch it down back to the ground - far away from me.
    Sit on it till it squeezes through the soil.
    Take a hammer and knock on it a million times so it would just disappear.

    But nay, its a bump that would never perish.

    Teaching me how to be equivalent to the strongest man on earth.
    Realising the darkness that would recede under the light.
    A touch of the bump gives the slightest prick.
    Alas, the finger bleeds - but only for a moment.

    Submitted on 2008-03-31 08:55:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really good. the part "A touch of the bump gives the slightest prick. Alas, the finger bleeds - but only for a moment." it brought back memories
    | Posted on 2008-12-14 00:00:00 | by BloodLustKira | [ Reply to This ]

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