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    Author: insanegemini
    ASL Info:    18/f/tx
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 24/50/56
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angst
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    Rip it out
    Through it against to wall
    The dripping blood on the wall
    Satisfactory
    Yet agonizing at the same time

    Physical pain is a pin prick
    To the psychological hurting
    That engulfs me

    My pulsating heart sits in the corner
    Still bleeding
    The knife that pushed me to the limit
    Rest in my hands
    Open to anyone now

    Staring back in the reflection of the knife
    No longer my image
    But those that cause the hurt
    Those that banish the damned
    Those that choose to not see
    And those that put down

    Longer
    I gaze at it
    They vanish
    Soon my own figure appears
    It stares at me
    What is this?
    I?

    The realization hits me
    It was not them that caused my suffering
    But I and my own personal fault
    For absorbing them

    I glance at the now lifeless heart
    Lying against the wall
    Motionless

    I am dead
    Dead to the world
    Dead to myself
    And itís all me to blame








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      Some parts are a bit too long. It's way too long all together IMO. Good though. Thought provoking. Some words make sense where they are but seem unneeded.
    | Posted on 2008-03-31 00:00:00 | by Greiga | [ Reply to This ]


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