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    dots Submission Name: WhatShe said to him byJamiiNesbittdots
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    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 988
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 837



    Description:
       please no grammatical suggestion the poem is written as such on purpose

    can you figure out why??

    inspired by the play: Shape of things by Neil LeBute


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    dotsWhatShe said to him byJamiiNesbittdots
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    What She said to him

    Did you tell him hes fine just the way
    he is
    Did you tell him never change, even
    though he did
    A liars lies are truths but half
    Like stupid two miles far from daft

    You light the match and Hes the flame
    You knew from then hed play your game
    Or was it not a game at all
    Just a mirror 6ft tall
    To match His stature, match His soul
    That truth was not just half but whole
    You made Him see
    or did he see
    The kind of guy that
    He could be
    With a gentle phrase
    into His ear
    Did he hear what He wanted to hear
    You told him hes fine just the way
    he is?
    .no, you told him to change and that He did




    Submitted on 2008-03-31 11:30:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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