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    dots Submission Name: Sonnet 1dots
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    Author: Fallyn Angel
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 44/69/91
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsSonnet 1dots
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    In a second it takes your life.
    For some still live to se another day.
    It can be taken away by a knife.
    Everyone wants you to live and stay.
    All you can see is inside your eyelids.
    No one knows where you will end up at all.
    You can see yourself with heavens kids.
    You surely will not end up at the mall.
    Who knows if you will end up in Hell.
    How many times have you tried? At least seven.
    Someone could come up behind you and yell.
    No one knows why people try suicide.
    Most people want to put their life aside.




    Submitted on 2008-03-31 12:55:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ah, a sonnet! Like a poor man finding the Hope Diamond! More sonnets, more.... pretty darn good sonnet here...a few quibbles, but I'll let 'em pass and say... bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-04-02 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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