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    dots Submission Name: Chapter 1: The Meetingdots
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    Author: Fallyn Angel
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    Words: 370
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    dotsChapter 1: The Meetingdots
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    Brendon Urie was out for a stroll in good old Connecticut. He was there for a concert and wanted to get some air before he had to go on. He walked and walked and a girl on a bike bumped into a curb and flew off her bike and he caught her. She smiled at him and he smiled back.
    “Are you alright miss?” He asked with great concern for her well being.
    “Yeah I’m fine. Actually better infact.”She replied with a smile on her face as he held her in her arms.
    “Alright as long as you are.” He placed her on the ground and smiled at her. “I’m Brendon, Brendon Urie.And you are?” He looked at the name tag on her apron that said ‘Jillian’ and smiled some.
    “Jillian. My names Jillian and I’m late for work.” She picked up her bike as she spoke to him and walked a little bit away from him. He followed her intently.
    “So do you like bands?” He asked with great interest. I mean if you do maybe you could come and see Panic! At The Disco tonight at Toad’s Place. We’re having a concert and I’d love for you to come.” He looked at her with a serene look on his face of seriousness and smiled a little as she looked back at him limping a little as she walked her bike.
    “Umm… I have to work tonight so I’m not sure I can. I can’t ask for time off because I just started and well I can’t sorry, Brendon.”She looked down at the ground while limping some afraid of the look on his face.
    “Well maybe I can come see you tomorrow at your work or something? I mean if you’re not that busy that is.” He looked at her limping and smiled some hoping she would say yes.
    “Well I guess. I work at K-MART up here. You can come see me I guess. I mean I’m not that busy at all for you.” She smiled at him as she replied to his answer and he smiled back. He ran down the street back to the hotel smiling and she walked to K-MART to go to work.




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