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    dots Submission Name: Imbrogliodots
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    Author: insipid sky
    Elite Ratio:    4.59 - 142/145/28
    Words: 29
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 994
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 206



    Description:
       
    One night.
    Stand up.
    Raise your hand.
    Who hasn't?

    What a perplexing affair.


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    dotsImbrogliodots
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    Be gone by morning,
    Before eyes open
    To see the sunrise;
    Leave quietly
    So as not to disturb
    Those who'd rather not
    bear witness
    to such injurious acts.




    Submitted on 2008-03-31 14:07:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think the flow is just right. However, you should consider expanding this. It could be even better.

    Very well written.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2008-04-04 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      sounds like most of america. most people would run away that help someone who is getting mugged or something. But the person that is sneaking away commited the crime right? Like the name to very inventive and a good word. Good poem but it doens't quite flow right. I can't explain it.
    | Posted on 2008-04-01 00:00:00 | by cor | [ Reply to This ]


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