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    dots Submission Name: the world of the livingdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsthe world of the livingdots
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    i strip the sun,
    quell back my lonely, lingering eyes
    & nap into the pale air
    like the birds that you adore.

    i make love to the earth
    with touching fingers
    that trickle all feather-like
    across some new future.

    i coil the old soul
    inside my make-ready heart,
    live, love
    & melt inward
    into the art of it all.

    if i draw a path,
    a line
    from the beginning of my life
    to the moment i met you,
    the outline of my love
    would form a storm
    into the world
    like a poem.

    myself...
    iíd rather forget
    that everything exists
    and blend into the selflessness
    of nothing.
    this is where i find whatís left of me,
    in the endless shuffle
    of what is known.

    cry me a river
    so i can return to the ocean
    of my youth.
    iíve found nothing but evil
    in the world of the living.

    i wish,
    but the beast is everywhere...




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