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    dots Submission Name: The Witch's Treedots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 1034/1091/516
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
    Total Views: 132
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    dotsThe Witch's Treedots
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    Out of the night when the werewolf cries
    By the bole of the old Witch’s’ Tree
    The dark stars shimmer, begin to rise,
    The moon’s face there in the dead lake lies
    Like some ship in a dark shallow sea.

    And here the shimmering stars soon jell
    Like the pale froth on new white-capped waves,
    Here Sirens come out to strut and sell
    Such love as will lead you onto hell
    And fast into a moldering grave.

    There on the hills where the shadows be,
    That fast race when the wan moon is done,
    Comes the far crash of a haunted sea
    That echoes on through the weed filled lea
    Where the vampires shamble and run.

    Out of the night when the werewolf cries
    By the bole of the old Witch’s’ Tree
    The dark stars shimmer, begin to rise,
    The moon’s face there in the dead lake lies
    Like some ship in a dark shallow sea.





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    ||| Comments |||
      I whole heartedly agree with Ron Cole.....
    This place that you have written of surely sounds like a place to avoid!

    Still, it requires talent to paint a picture of something that renders its every detail........and in this write-up, I don't think teher could be more mystery or thrills for the readers, if they read it all through.

    Excellent rhyme scheme again ....I really wonder how you manage it....especially at poems so highly based on imagination and fantasy of extreme sorts.

    Nice and suitable title, you have got here.

    You are good at this.
    | Posted on 2008-04-13 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      Brr! Sounds like a place to avoid!

    I like this:

    'Here Sirens come out to strut and sell
    Such love as will lead you onto hell
    And fast into a moldering grave.'

    Sounds like a sailors wrong turn into hell!!!!!

    This delightful poem has your signature story, with excellent structure, story, and rhyme scheme. Cheers for another outstanding mythical poem for our delight!
    | Posted on 2008-04-01 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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