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    dots Submission Name: Existencedots

    Author: inkpen
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    4.12 - 391/199/61
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Society
    Total Views: 1017
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 606


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    Our toxic fumes
    A long wars Ba-booms
    Some will lose, some will win
    None are saints, all will sin
    Inner hate makes us dead
    Young love may keep us ahead
    So many corrupted souls
    Many more hearts with so many holes
    Salty tears when we look back
    How it all seems to move so very fast
    If none try, none will achieve
    Theres a time to laugh, and a time to grieve
    Around and around we all go
    Where we're going, we have yet to know
    Soft, sweet music in the distance
    This is our planets long, cold existence

    Submitted on 2008-04-01 14:32:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think this is absolutely brilliant. It flows very nicely and I love what it describes. I love it all. Favorited.
    | Posted on 2008-04-01 00:00:00 | by leadpencil | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful words... striking. you have quite a good poem here. i wouldnt change a thing,i love the twists and love the imagery
    favorite parts:
    "Some will lose, some will win
    None are saints, all will sin"
    "So many corrupted souls
    Many more hearts with so many holes"
    great write! thanks for sharing!
    | Posted on 2008-04-01 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]

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