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    dots Submission Name: Hateful Worlddots
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    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 762
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 694



    Description:
       Just a poem I wrote during the FCAT when I was feeling angsty.


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    dotsHateful Worlddots
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    Just stop
    Don't say a word
    I know what you're thinking
    And it's just absurd
    Why poison the air
    With your hate
    Now you might not care
    But just you wait
    It's fine now
    So stop making excuses
    Stop fighting
    You know it's useless
    Here we go
    Yet again
    It's impossible to find
    This peace and zen
    A fabled tale
    A myth I believe
    For in this world
    There is only apathy
    Hate for one another
    Fights and disputes galore
    How do they all end up?
    Another useless war
    Why do we live in
    Such a hateful world?




    Submitted on 2008-04-01 17:11:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was cool,definately my type of poem,you are very good at sticking to the rhyme.
    I would also like to know why this world is so hateful,but I have never figured it out.
    My favorite Stanza was " Hate for one another,
    Fights and disputes galore,
    How do they all end up,
    another useless war.


    Freaken cool,
    I wish I wrote that,
    I write a lot of theese types of poems,
    this one was great
    | Posted on 2008-04-01 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]


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