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    dots Submission Name: Lovedots
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    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLovedots
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    Love
    Slow
    Sweet
    Passionate love
    Love that takes time
    Time to build
    To grow
    To grip your heart
    Is there love at first sight?
    Maybe
    As for me
    Yeah
    Right
    Impossible
    To find love
    True love
    Love so wanted
    But lost
    Wasted
    On people who donít appreciate
    Donít know
    How lucky they are
    To have found love
    Or at least something close
    Close enough
    Close enough to get a taste
    To crave for more
    To crave for closeness
    To yearn a touch
    A simple touch is all
    Yet for the simple things
    Itís hardest of all
    To find
    To appreciate
    I sigh and shake my head
    As I return to waiting
    Watching the world pass by
    All around me
    As it leaves me behind
    Behind the curtain
    That keeps others away
    That prevents me from ever finding
    This desired love




    Submitted on 2008-04-01 17:17:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Oh good job! I really liked this. I think it flowed really nice. Just kind of kept going, nothing that really threw it off. I really like the ending.
    "Behind the curtain
    That keeps others away
    That prevents me from ever finding
    This desired love."
    Thats my favorite part. Love is tough! And I really think this kind of shows what love is. Yearning to touch and all that. Keep it up!

    -Inkpen

    P.S- Twilight is my addiction too. ;)
    | Posted on 2008-04-01 00:00:00 | by inkpen | [ Reply to This ]


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