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    dots Submission Name: Butterflydots

    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Peaceful as she flies
    In the clear blue sky
    Random colors on her wings
    From the predator
    She remains unseen
    Landing on a flower
    She extends her tongue
    And savors the ambrosia
    Of her life
    The flavor
    For which she exists
    Her thoughts wild
    And unknown to mankind
    Forever unknown
    Never exploited
    Flying past the horizon
    Over the edge
    As we stand staring after her
    A mystery with wings
    The butterfly

    Submitted on 2008-04-01 17:44:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow. I've never thought of a butterfly that way before. You made me think of one so vividly, and to that I say good job.
    "She extends her tongue
    And savors the ambrosia
    Of her life"
    I liked that part the most because in my mind I actually visualized a butterfly. Normally I was afraid of butterflies, but now I look at them in a whole different way. Nice job.
    Faves addition.
    | Posted on 2008-04-02 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]

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