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    dots Submission Name: Untitled ftmdots

    Author: maybe_tommorow
    ASL Info:    17/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 30/28/13
    Words: 334
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 674
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       So it's not done, at least I don't think it is. And I can't figure out a good title... but I needed someplace to store it. Comments, critism, suggestions are all welcome and apprieciated.

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    dotsUntitled ftmdots

    I pick up a pen and my thoughts spill out
    What I know, what I don't, what I wish I knew about
    Physically you're here, but emotionaly so far away
    My lips move but you don't hear a word I say
    And I reach out to take hold of your hand
    But you're looking at her and I just don't understand
    Why I'm not enough for you anymore
    Oh look, there;s a piece of my heart on the floor
    It's the piece I gave to you, not so long ago
    Standing by Falls Creek, watching the water flow
    When I was so scared but I took the risk
    How was I to know it would all end up like this?
    I wish you could understand why I went for him
    I needed someone, and he was my friend
    You were in Italy, and I din't know what to do
    We were talking and, well, you know what that led to
    And I just fell completely head over heels
    Sometimes I can't control how my heart feels
    It was a mistake that I'm not proud to say I made
    And now I have to live with the cards I've played
    Maybe it's not worth it to fight for what's already dead
    So I'm thinking we should just quit while we're ahead
    Because you know we're just going to hurt each other more
    Please just remind me what it is we're fighting for
    You know, you're the last person on Earth I want to lose
    But I've given you your options, it's up to you to choose
    And if you cut me out, well, I'll survive somehow
    i'll be upset, i'll probably cry, and then I'll take my exit bow
    Because if you're ahppy with herm then that's what should be
    Instead of a broken should-have-been a.k.a. you and me
    So im sitting here at our old place, watching the water flow
    And i think i finally reaize, im going to have to let you go

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