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    dots Submission Name: The Predatordots
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    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Predatordots
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    Lurking in the shadows
    On a moonless night
    The stars show little
    Yet revealing all
    Stalking the prey
    Unbeknownst to it
    Its life is near an end
    Scrambling in the underbrush
    Leaves flying into the air
    Alerting the sensitive ears
    Of the hunter
    Silently he leaps
    Through the air
    Tackling the thrush to the ground
    It writhes fruitlessly to break free
    And gives one final squeel
    Of defeat
    Loud enough to scare another
    Out of slumber
    And rushing to the others
    Alerting the forest
    Of the intruder
    The birds fly
    Rushing from the scene
    Towards the safe haven
    Now he sleeps
    Avoided by all
    Out of fear
    There he lays
    Awaiting the next day
    The predator




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