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    dots Submission Name: A Single Drop Of Blooddots

    Author: Savannah Cullen
    Elite Ratio:    1.66 - 9/37/48
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A New Moon poem.

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    dotsA Single Drop Of Blooddots

    A single drop of blood
    Was all it took
    For an entire family
    To uproot
    Leaving the girl behind
    Not saying goodbye
    Afraid of what the next day will bring
    Is all she feels
    As he falls silent
    The only way to describe it
    How will they survive?
    The star-crossed lovers of our tale
    From the pain
    As they say
    One cannot live without the other
    He must return to her
    Or her end will near
    Leading to his as well
    To live
    To die
    Breaking a promise
    Or keeping his word
    How does he decide?
    He can't
    The pressure is too great
    Time flies by
    His decision is made
    He returms to his angel
    And pleads for forgiveness
    Which is gladly given
    All is right once again
    All caused by a single drop of blood.

    Submitted on 2008-04-01 19:31:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww... that was so cute. I love it. I really don't know what to say. I don't need to criticize it because it was very well-written. So, good job.
    | Posted on 2008-04-02 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]

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