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    dots Submission Name: Metaphoredots

    Author: Jessica Lynn
    ASL Info:    22/f/mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121/119/57
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    I look around my room and see a metaphore of my life. The walls are yellow and peeling with age. Holes of various sizes are pierced and torn, covered by a stray picture or sticker. Clothes that I've worn countless times grow tired as the litter the floor. They smell of must and their wrinkles are proof of being shoved and crushed. The carpet was once white but is now brownish gray, speckled with remnants of gum from years past. Mold grows on the glass of my window. My mirror's frame has been torn from it on all sides but one. Smeared kiss prints made from lip gloss show in the light. The mirror itself shows me. I don't know whether I belong with my surroundings or not.

    Submitted on 2008-04-01 19:52:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Which crack do you dwell in, I really liked the imagery in this piece, whenever I have pictures flashing in my head when I read something the author has done a good job. and P.S. if you can write like this I don't think that you belong in the room.

    Good Write,,

    | Posted on 2008-04-29 00:00:00 | by Spin | [ Reply to This ]
      ah jes! you exaggerate. but i guess thats what makes it great...i personally believe you belong in a palace with soft velvet curtains and every small detail inlaid with gold, incrusted with jewels... :) someday jes. someday...
    | Posted on 2008-04-23 00:00:00 | by Impy | [ Reply to This ]
      A fine, very fine extented metaphor... really quite nicely done--no, I don't believe that you belong with thie metaphor at all!! bravo... bravo.. bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-04-03 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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